Here’s yet another poem of mine.. (kinda longish..)



Drea
02-17-2002, 04:52 AM
02-06-02

My Emotions- My Ode to You
By Tifa L.

I miss you.
Your touch, your words, your voice–
that I haven�t heard yet but it�s future timbre�s echo across my soul.

I wonder what would it be like to hold you-
to touch you–
to kiss you.

The thought sends shivers down my spine.

Knowing that I don�t know you yet, but yet I want to plunder the
depths of your soul anyway…

If you�d let me.

Let me catch your dreams–
let me see your fear–
let me take your pain and fill it with the sweet succor of my Love.

Never before have I felt so open–
so free–
so wanton–

and it�s all for you.

I wonder what this dizzying infatuation is–
this hungry gnawing needy want for some sort of contact with you.

I want to soar on high…
On wings of ecstasy�
with you.

I want to tell you�
to express to you what�s in my heart�
to tell you the emotions that dwell in my soul but�

but� I can�t.

And so I retreat into the abyss of my shame�
and I decide not to tell you; �I love you,�
though I CRAVE to tell you… but I keep it all in because you�ll
never know,
so I hide yet again,
becoming an enigma�
becoming a part of the shadows�
…until the one day that I am forced to confess.

Until then�
I can only look up at the stars and hope for true love�
hoping for you to warm my cold bed�
hoping for your love�
your touch�
your embrace�
your kiss�

hope.. hope and pray for the day when�

my life goes right�

my days are bright�

… until the day that you are mine…

… if only.

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Well there goes.. my poem…. how was it?

Tell me ur likes/dislikes…. I need the feedback ppls plz… 🙂


chihuadog
02-17-2002, 05:21 AM
Wow, I can never write like that. This poem is practically a song. I think it’s great. Great use of words, giving the poem more depth. I also like the dramatic ending. My favorite part of the poem is probably the third last paragraph(the one that starts with "And so I retreat into the abyss of my shame"). Not sure why I like that part the best… maybe because it’s the climax of the poem?

Fatal Divide
02-17-2002, 01:17 PM
That’s a really great poem Tifa. Really emotional, and great use of vocabulary. I really liked the whole section which started with "And so I retreat into the abyss of my shame". I’m looking foward to reading more of your work.

SSJ
02-17-2002, 01:17 PM
Wow thats another great poem. I always love to read em as they are always interesting and well writin. I don’t even dislike one thing. Keep up the great poems tifa!:)

Merl
02-18-2002, 02:42 AM
The poem was beautiful, emotionally it pulled at me and completely well. . .

It hits me perfectly, its where I am right now, exactly how I feel. . .


Drea
02-18-2002, 03:57 AM
Originally posted by Deus Immortale
The poem was beautiful, emotionally it pulled at me and completely well. . .

It hits me perfectly, its where I am right now, exactly how I feel. . .

Ohh…. how you feel for who Mr. Immortale.. (if you don’t mind me asking..) 🙂


Merl
02-18-2002, 04:25 AM
Thats a question all but one knows the answer to, and it’ll be that way for a while

Drea
02-18-2002, 04:28 AM
hmmmm….. mk.

Well…. I had my secrets about "06" so I guess you can have urs.

But when to decide to tell whomever-it-is… lemme know.

I wanna be the flower gyrl @ you guys’s wedding… j/k.

😀 😀 😀