Tips: I accept them. But not nessarily use them.
Chapter 1:
Sattilite Base, Spira
Blackheart walked around, shocked at the news coming in.
"Yuna FREED SHU-YIN’S HEART!!! She’s getting far too strong, Agent Buddy." Eddie had sent an assination attempt after her, bribing the Al Bhed. But she still wasn’t caught.
Blackheart checked the next report. "So Zdain was stronger then i thought. Anything else, Agent Mogster??"
"Lord Blackheart, i must stop now. Quniar’s coming."
Blackheart turned off the computer screen, brandishing a Fire materia. "So now Mogster gets eaten by Quinar. Great. Just great"
"And Sir, your clone Eddie was cut done by Fashionsnob, as Fartoosmart reports.". "FASHIONSNOB!!! WHAT NEXT, FARTOOSMART BEING DISCOVERED BY LOGICBANE!!!"
"And Sephiroth has been defeated, and no, Tifa hasn’t been killed. Shinra has gone patheticon!!". Eddie swore under his breath. His plan was to have Shinra suck out the Mako and through Rufus, send it to his factory construction. He wanted to kill Tifa because a depressed Cloud would be beaten by such an event.
"And what of Squall???"
"According to Agent Rinoa, he has defeated all of Sorceress Ultimecia’s plots succesfully."
"NOW THE WIFE’S DEAD!!!!" exclaimed Blackheart. "I’LL AVENGE HER!!! PREPARE THE PORTALS!!!! RELOCATE THE REMAINING BURGUNDIAN FORCES AND USE THEM AGAINST THE RONSO!! I WANT A FOOTHOLD THERE!!!"
Blackheart thought. "Black is getting far too powerful. And now Tidus is back. AAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRGGGGGGGHHHHHHH!!!".
He’d lost his foothold against Black. Cloud and Quniar were getting dangerously close to the portals to Spira. If they got there, then all hell would break loose for Blackheart…
I almost hate to do this, but you’ve hit on a couple serious pet peeves of mine.
This was a complete and utter waste of time. It made no sense, was full of typos, brought up new characters with zero development, defiled old characters and debased their roles in their respective games, and on top of all that, you’re apparently trying to make a serial out of it.
Your first two posts on these boards have already shown you to be an attention-seeking idiot, having both been new threads intended to advertise products of your lousy imagination. Go annoy people somewhere else. 😡
Prak’s quote from Robin Hood: Prince of Thieves in his sig is much better.