Questional Possibilities

A sound an echo…
No just bullshit
The voice the laughter..
No just bullshit
The smiles, the tears
No just bullshit
The smoke, the mirrors
Clearly bullshit

So lets smoke a box of cigars!
Drink a gallon brandy!
Empty a sea of beer!
Power to the alcoholics!!!

This poem would have been a lot better if you replaced the word ‘bullshit’ with ‘hamsters’.

A sound an echo…
No just bullshit
The voice the laughter..
No just bullshit
The smiles, the tears
No just bullshit
The smoke, the mirrors
Clearly bullshit

So lets smoke a box of cigars!
Drink a gallon brandy!
Empty a sea of beer!
Power to the alcoholics!!!

Go Alcoholics go!!

D:

I love it. Best poem ever.

This poem would have been a lot better if you replaced the word ‘bullshit’ with ‘hamsters’.

Agreed.

Repeating a line is only effective if it’s a really good line. "No just bullshit" is just kind of… everyday talk. Doesn’t really feel like you’re conveying much.