ice!~neko
03-25-2002, 11:48 AM
i wrote this poem for someone i know, its nameless:
I�m sorry,
Sorry I couldn�t be there for you, when you needed it most.
I�m sorry for all the suffering you went through.
I�m sorry for not understanding.
If only I knew sooner, I could have helped.
Brought you out of this darkness.
—
In this dismal world we live in,
A place so black and cold,
I see a girl, so beautiful,
Her heart as good as gold.
Standing there, but no one cares�
Lost in this empty place.
Her glowing body, her gentle lips,
Her sweet, and innocent face.
But beneath her fa�ade, a young girl cries,
And drops a gentle tear.
Shouting out, into the world,
But sadly no one hears.
And I do pray, that one day,
The world will find a way,
To open up,
And see that life,
Is just another way.
chihuadog
03-25-2002, 05:32 PM
The first one is okay. It’s good, but it’s only mediocre good. The second one is way better, imo. I think it sounds better, and I like the choice of words. Well done.
ice!~neko
03-25-2002, 09:08 PM
its all one poem… i wrote it for somone so its hard to understand why they are connected =\
SSJ
03-25-2002, 09:17 PM
Those are good. Good poetry, well done, nice words.
Anima Relic
03-25-2002, 10:52 PM
not bad neko. Two very enthusiastic thumbs up, fine holiday fun 🙂
Zachary
03-30-2002, 05:26 PM
Thats a great poem. Its very well done.
Ishtar
04-11-2002, 02:59 AM
timmay… that’s so damn sad… and the strange part is i know what it’s about…
Zachary
04-18-2002, 05:56 PM
Very Very sad. My mom likes poems i’ll tell her this one.
christopher
04-18-2002, 09:25 PM
Very good!! I rilly like the words you use in your poem(s), They made it flow rilly well!